Textual concerns.
Purpose. The purpose of your newsletter is pretty easy to see. It’s providing information for the general public about the situation (obesity) and defining it, explaining why it’s bad, explaining what the audience can to prevent it, how to combat it, how to feel healthy, and offer help for people already suffering from the situation. Since you didn’t have a whole lot of text written just yet, I’m going off of what you include in your ‘special points of interest’ and ‘inside this issue’ sections. But from what you plan to include, you have all the bases covered. You have your newsletter very nicely outlined.
Audience. I didn’t notice you focusing on any particular audience, but rather just people in general. This would mean that your audience has a wide array of knowledge on your subject, so I think you did right by defining the problem despite how common it is, it may even contain information more knowledgeable readers might not have known before. Even if your readers may be familiar with your subject, they can easily use your section labeled ‘inside this issue’ to skip to whatever interests them, like eating healthy meals or how to stick to a diet. Also, your ‘points of interest’ section does a good job motivating more knowledgeable readers of actually reading your newsletter, telling them that while you start out with some basic knowledge and facts, it gets more in-depth as you go along.
Arrangement. Since you don’t have a lot of text just yet and you’re not sure about what you want to write about in your articles, I’d hold off on this section. Deal with this when you have more text written, once you have more text it’ll be easier to tell how and where your newsletter fits together well and works well or how and where it doesn’t. But I like I said before, I think you have a good starting outline.
Sections. You have your sections clearly defined. From what you have included and titled in your ‘inside this issue’ section, I can already guess what the purpose will be of each article. I think you have everything covered for this one. But once you have more text, I would look over your newsletter and make sure some all your information or text are in the right sections or if they might be better off in another section.
Ethos. From the text you have, it demonstrates that you are both a person of goodwill and good sense. You are a person of goodwill because you are actively trying to help people who either are already overweight, are at risk of becoming overweight, or are worried about becoming overweight and want to know how to prevent it from happening. You demonstrate good sense because you know what you are talking about and you are familiar with the subject.
Document design.
1. 1. The readability of your document is good. It doesn’t feel cramped but nicely spaced. But you might to reevaluate it again after you include more text. It’s pretty easy to navigate and your headings are easy to identify.
2. 2. Good choice of colors. My high school health book used the same colors, so the colors you used kind of seemed like the natural choice for me.
3. 3. Font is good, easy to read.
4. 4. The visuals you do have reflect the content you have in your text and articles. They do invoke interest about what you may be saying in your articles. It is difficult to read the text on your pie chart featured on the first page, as well as on the first visual you have on your second page.
5. 5. I’m a little confused about the pie chart you have on your first page. What is it trying to show, is it percentage of Americans who fit in each category or is it showing something else?
6. 6. You’ve done a good job at keeping your newsletter consistent so far, but review once you are closer to completion.
7. 7. The contrast you have in your newsletter is good. The headings are in a different color, size, and font, and they are consistent.
8. 8. Proximity is good.
Overall Assessment
1. 1. The design of your newsletter reflects a friendly and healthy tone that will enable your reader to get the most out of your newsletter. Your newsletter is very nicely outlined in your ‘inside this issue’ section and if you stick to it your newsletter should turn out very nicely, but review and reevaluation is always a good idea once you are closer to completion. Your newsletter is easy to navigate and find specific areas of interest.
2. 2. For Tuesday, I suggest just working on your text. You have the design of your newsletter down and it looks good; now start writing your articles. Once you have more text, you can work with the arrangement and the other textual concerns better. Also, I noticed a few typos and a word left out in a spot or two but nothing drastic, just be careful as you write.
